First of all, thanks for your time and your improvements, I played it with my version and it sounded well for me, however your version seems easier to read and actually as complete as the song. I hope you don't mind me for this but I don't understand some of the pull-offs, exactly the ones who comes like this:
First, second and last parts of the verse.
If you could send anything with your own playing I would be greateful. Even if it is something like a vocaroo.
Thank you very much.